lucid08 2008-03-11 23:12:42

First off, notice the rhyme scheme in this post
Observe and apply it next time or you're toast;
Coast to coast, any real MC can keep a beat
and any n***a can say they rep the streets
but at least try and bring some heat next time,
cuz i know "up", "him", and "kill" don't rhyme
point being, stick to makin the instrumentals
cuz dude yo lines be nothing short of sentimental,
detrimental to any real person's mental wit
so keep to the beats cuz dude, you weren't meant to spit.

Read my review of ya song if ya didn't catch the message here. Keep it real...

lucid08 2008-03-11 23:22:46

(after reading review response) whoa whoa whoa what the fuck? EMINEM can't rhyme? listen to his infinite shit, look at how ill this half-of-a-verse is...I can probably list 20 rhymes in these 7 lines.

"Imitator, Intimidator, Stimulator, Simulator of data, Eliminator
There's never been a greater since the burial of Jesus
Fuck around and catch all of the venereal diseases
My thesis will smash a stereo to pieces
My accapella releases classic masterpieces through telekinesis
And eases you mentally, gently, sentimentally, instrumentally
With entity, dementedly meant to be Infinite"

That's what real lyricism is. AND I wasn't trying to sound like an asshole, I just try to keep shit real. If you don't like dealing with the truth that's your problem not mine, I was trying to help you by tellin you to keep at what you do best, cuz ya beats is hot. If you wanna keep denying everything that everyone tells you about your raps, I won't bother trying to help you out.

lucid08 2008-03-11 23:29:04

Oh and one last thing (I hate leaving multiple posts but I had to bring this up)

I told you before, I'm trying to be real with you. If you've read all of the other reviews that weren't part of A-Gang, you'd see that everyone wants you to keep with the beats. The only reason they tell you that you're good, is because otherwise they'd be ruining their own reputations. "omg A-Gang said it's own member can't rap, what a bunch of fucktards"; do you think they want their 12 year old fans to start thinking that? NO. Do everyone a favor, and listen to the real people. Sometimes you gotta look at the big picture ya know?

lucid08 2008-03-12 00:11:51

lmfao 4 posts, I feel like an idiot. I guess you don't even make beats, for some reason I had that misconception. So I guess to paraphrase everything I've said, just quit.

Mackity 2008-03-12 17:40:10

YO LIPZ YO.. STOP FUCKIN BN MY N***A HE IS WAY TOO NASTY MY N***A, 1UP N***A 1UP 1 FUCKIN UP GREEN MUSHROOM PLUMBER FROM BROOKLYN FUCK HE ONLY USED 20 MINUTES ONLY 20 SO STOP U SUCK LIPZ BNN IS NASTY HE TAKIN OVER THE GAME.

nah really tho i coulda did what he did in the time length of the beat.. what is it 1 minute? BUT STILL BN IS BETTER THAN YOU

MPZ 2008-03-13 01:50:11

Yo BN, you stirred up some fire here. xD

Lipz is mad at Mackity for giving you props. If your bored, check out my page on the story. lol

Mackity and Lipz know each other in real life, so its more interesting then ordinary newgrounds beef.

Lipz insulted Mackity saying that Mackity is a "cock ridah" and that he was afraid to beat battle DJ SES. (Although Mackity doesn't make beats. lol)

- MPZ

MPZ 2008-03-14 20:17:14

Rakoon at his finest. LOL

<a href="http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/130409">http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/130409</a>

- MPZ

MPZ 2008-03-15 05:27:48

Lipz is such a pussy.

<a href="http://img91.imageshack.us/my.php?image=lolna6.png">http://img91.imageshack.us/my.php?ima ge=lolna6.png</a>

Shensetta is my SN on aim, so Lipz's older brother was on my screen name and makes him shit buildings. xD

He signs off when he said hes going up stairs in like 5 minutes. LOL

- MPZ

Trancent 2008-04-12 01:30:05

Well, I thought that certain parts of it were really good. :D Basically lines 9-17.
So yhey to yew~! -hughug-
<3

chucktownbluv 2008-07-06 12:01:21

Album? O RLY???

Looking for guest artists! Head over to my page for details!!!!

MCL 2008-07-07 23:25:35

this is a rap song? good for you.
i have to get the fuck out of here...

TheEyeOfMusiK 2008-07-19 21:04:38

i laugh at a fake bitch/ who got no flow to fight with
and get scared quick when i asked for his crib is
so my question is why u trynna act hard?
why u trynna talk slang wen yea ass lookin soft
like a wet cloth/ get the wet wipes if u "pissed" off
like a stain on a dish imma brush you off
cuz i stay spittin fire like i lost my job

Take notes kid. and if u gonna try to diss me. come harder, get flow, and better delivery.

"And if I'm blind then you must be deaf"
R.I.P Broken Needle's "poem career" 2006-2007
='(

mseemercury 2008-08-15 16:22:04

new song man <a href="http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/165132">http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/liste n/165132</a> let me know what you think

RoobyKillAll 2008-12-24 11:01:31

Step up ya game for fame
When this day's brought nothin' but shame
Lay slain in the rain no prayer complainin'
Tryin' to maintain the rep, don't care
Your words are so plain, mundane
Flow's gotta somehow sustain my train
of concentration without hesitation,
Blow you into obliteration thinkin'
These lil one syllable words winnin' you the NG nation
Be patient as I face ya takin' time
Out my day to spray ya as you disobey
The right way, callin' artists gay
When your bars are not far from 6 words
Flip the shit up hard bitch and you'll go further
You just so damn sweet like original werthers
Fillin' ya with candy 'cus these words wont occur
You read 'em and think someone sayin' slurs
You so damn mean and no one's sayin' thurs
So your departer of the first is probably worse
than the rest of ya verse be best if ya got into the hearse
So I don't get blood on this new shirt after leavin' ya in the dirt.
Syllables fillin' in these holes like miracles that tug and pull
So uncomfortable as you find out that I'm unstopable.
Munchy time - get the food?
Got beef? - nah no mood
Like I set the game like I'm playin' clue
I know you and the hood you pull through
Got beef never gotta worry 'bout me
Walkin' down your streets lookin' for ya
I just embarass ya with the fairest pairs
of wordplay sayin' phrases stuck in you head for days
So when you think you gonna blast me
Through ya teeth with these words that ya speak
Gotta realize no substance cuts somethin' that is harder
Like I got a diamond beak that I obtained from my father
Your words just comin' out like water so I don't even bother
Mistakin' that for flow when you should know
you're just the star of your own horror show bro.

And we're all fuckin' laughin.

RoobyKillAll 2008-12-24 21:27:57

Hey that actually wasn't half bad. Nothin' personal really. I take this big website as a game n shit and I just wanna beef with someone to write shit about. Aiight now lemme give 'er a go.

Oh so apparently you got some flow
Starin' these folks down fo sho
But befo' you go and flare up hope that I choke
This is jokes as fire stokes me from within smokin'
Man with no mission just listen as I put these clips in
loaded with words observe as your learnin' curve burns to the Earth
Turnin' you to dirt not worth the hearse or the pain at birth
And sure your words blur together like you're sprayin' slurs
But what you sayin's never clever, words severed, beat's untethered
As your words tickle me like feathers
Until I fuckin go bizzerk, murked on your own turf
Windin' up dead on the middle of the surf
Just a little lead flyin' to the center of your shirt
And what's next you stress lookin' as best as you can
Standin' on your hands impressin' a man for a gram
But what you sayin' been said like grains of sand
runnin' through my hands from every other rap band
Strap plans as I blam you and your fam with this pen
Never guessin' drawin' smith and wessons, damn
never fessin' to the lessons of the law ma'am.
So guess you next then if ya wanna go raw
Lookin' like you less than, better need a plan
as I cram them words in tin cans for war
And just hand em off poppin' like molotovs
What you gots I saw by a thousand other MC's please
These same things said in threes, so funny
Original words so far from your lungs see
tryin' to outrun me as I'm gunnin' letters from my tummy
spittin' A B C's n**** please right to Z
and everythin' between websters dictionary
The words you depict so fictional
Tryin' to get a physical playin' pictionary, hysterical
and what I gots historical, what's in store for you
This shit's adorable as you spew words, chew ya food
and swallow before ya ruin my mood
Rooby.22s spewin through the few clues
To do what I gotta do to show you the rules
And never diss a man without knowin' the fool
For fame and be on top of the game lookin' shameful
So painful mouth full of words with no aim so
I blame those who never came for ya
When you needed help to change lanes brah.

See, you actually surprised me with writing some half decent but man you can't rap the words you've written at all. And goin' along with the whole big bad lejon bs is so... so... old man. Nothin' against any of ya, you're all decent rappers. But like, when you guys preach about being "the best" top shit sorta deal, insulting other artists and shit everywhere you guys fuckin' go, it's just old old old. I been here since '04 before any of you gang bangin' kids came around.

LOL this is Newgrounds. None of the people any of you are even talking to are in fact people like you. Most of these people have great sheltered lives and you're just marketing for the wrong thing here. No one cares about beef raps, it's just pathetic. Try writing about something that's not beef, and something completely different. I bet it's 100x harder for you than me. Prove me wrong.

RoobyKillAll 2008-12-26 09:51:51

Now see, you've got words written out half decent, but you completely ignore the beat. In your diss you start saying one word, then commit to another. You sound like you've no idea what you're reading. There are fumbles everywhere you dropped the verse butter fingers. Make a song seamless. Make a hook. Don't pause. And don't talk over it like a fucking answering machine brah. Your words are okay, and if you worked on your presentation a bit better I'd think you'd actually stand a chance here. But you don't. And you just take this as me insulting you. But it's not. It's constructive criticism and you can't fucking take it. This is why you needed a nursery rhyme to diss me.

Ya shit's preschool amigo.

Lejin 2008-12-26 09:55:11

Yo Needle notice these fragile chumps trying to cop a plee "its getting old" thats they alternative for screaming "STOP KILLING ME ALREADY AAAAAARRRRRG!!!!! STOP PLEASE I HATE IT"

the truth hurts! Pop a pain pill! =D
<<BANG>>KO!!!

RoobyKillAll 2008-12-26 10:42:48

Lejin, the way you interpret ""It's getting old" as "STOP KILLING ME" is the epitome of a man blinded by sheer ignorance. I got a vocabulary immunity system and when I hear the same thing twice shit don't phase me. Crazy éh G?

RoobyKillAll 2008-12-26 14:42:20

Wow ya slow ass I got my track in. Better fuckin' step to that bar. And you aint gettin' by doin' the limbo this time. Gotta fuckin' just it this time fella. ;)

RoobyKillAll 2008-12-26 16:28:46

As for buoying,

"just getting annoying reading ya shit makes me lose my buoying"
You can't just say that shit it's terrible. Are you actually serious? I know the definition of it but you've used the word so improperly.
Lose my buoying... lmfao. N**** you toying.